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The Hidden Flame, Page 34

posted 25th Feb 2012, 12:00 AM

The Hidden Flame, Page 34
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25th Feb 2012, 12:00 AM

Adam C.

I kinda like the first two panels, since I can see Ozais (and Lara) doing a sort of dance-fighting thing. Too bad I'm too uncreative to keep that going, though. Fire effects look good, at least.

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25th Feb 2012, 7:28 AM

Martin F.

Yeah, with the limited dialogue for this one it doesn't exactly give me a lot to say about it. I am happy with it though, and do think that the dance motif for the way Ozias and Lara fight could stand to be explored further. Sort of intended to do that here but for the most part wasn't sure how to approach it in writing - something to think on though.

One thing I never did get the chance to do in this chapter that this reminds me of - initially, Lara was going to go through giving Ozias elaborate Spanish introductions and often advice. Latter was at some point or other going to have a payoff of Sareena waiting until after that completely backfired for them to point out that she speaks Spanish.

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