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Shopping Star, Burning Bright- Page 22

posted 6th Nov 2015, 12:00 AM

Shopping Star, Burning Bright- Page 22
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6th Nov 2015, 12:00 AM

Adam C.

There we go. ^^ That should handle the Daylight Savings Time thing. ... Just watch; am sure this'll go up an hour late.

But yeah, easy page for me, just a lot of dialog. ^^ As a result, not much for me to talk about.

I think one of the biggest hints that the whole thing with Mercy killing Hazel was an act was the fact that Mercy's wifebeater and jeans were very much a costume for a typical thug. Between that and his desire to show off his pecs, had him take it off and get shirtless. Hazel does the same thing because his shirt was covered in stage blood.

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6th Nov 2015, 12:45 AM

Martin F.


Yeah, very talky page here, though tried to at least keep it fairly segmented without too much in the way of big continuous speeches in giant word balloons. A little bit of that, but all in all think I did okay with it.

Yeah, so we're finding out a little bit more about these three's backstories and where their characters come from here. All kind of have their parts in shaping the characters and where they're coming from, but isn't really too crucial to get the specifics; Hazel grew up low-income, Mercy was basically bred to be a criminal, Power we're getting to in the next page, about it.

And we get some explanation why Power's doing this, that's always good. Been actually rather enjoying writing the thing of her playing both sides in regards to this whole O'Hara thing - been kind of a small point and she's been up and down in how much of an active role she'd had but been liking just finding ways to put her in and making things connect back to her.

If wondering though, no, she's not going to be muscling in on the Mercy and Hazel storyline much. They're mostly doing their own thing.

Hey, the driver's redheaded. Wonder who that is.

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