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Moon to Blood, Page 2

posted 3rd Sep 2011, 12:00 AM

Moon to Blood, Page 2
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3rd Sep 2011, 12:00 AM

Martin F.

Pretty dialogue-heavy page here, but like the way it's looking. I could see the varying fonts and colors kind of throwing people off a little, but this is the only page in the chapter with this going on so it shouldn't be too big of an issue.

I'd thought about making this conversation the centerpiece of the chapter, though. It would have played out in a more direct manner if so, but I decided that this one would function better as an early introduction of a subplot that we'll be seeing as things go.

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3rd Sep 2011, 12:14 AM

Adam C.

This conversation being the focual point would certainly work as a mirror to Wright As Rayne, but definitely prefer the focus you went with. ^^ Also love the touches of the desert- would've been so easy for Abe to just make it a featureless plain but he went the extra mile with it.

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